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7. 8. 2. "under the law." Change back to original: "under the law . . . " (Sentenced is NOT finished because the other person now spoke and cut him off)

11. 3. 9. "M16" Change back to original: "MI6"

14. 1 14 " the terminal building and come out onto the airport apron." ??? Change back to original: "the terminal building coming out onto the airport apron."

15. 2. 10. ", and in the darkness, he moved his hand and" Remove commas or at least second comma Change back to original: "and in the darkness he moved his hand and"

22. 1. 18. "and those whose the labels were torn or abraded off" ??? Change to: "and the ones on which the labels were torn or abraded off"

28. 2. 4. " none of his or any of the" Change back to original: "none of his nor any of the"

36. 1. 3. "entire world, that night the" Change back to original: "entire world that night, the"

54. 4. 5. " the Lords took him aback." Change back to original: " the lords took him aback".

ABOVE: You only Capitalize lord when it is the NAME (House of Lords, Lord Guinness)

64. 3. 5 "him" They forgot a period as they changed it. Change to: "him."

BELOW: (There is refers to the previously mentioned airdrome not the motor car.)

73. Last paragraph "Well there it is," Change back to original: "Well there is," or better yet "Well there is an airport there,"

99. 4.5. "man he to whom had given" ???? Change to: "man to whom he had given"

113. 1. 2. "and the man delivered it" Change to: "and the men delivered it"

129. 3. 11. "with the family as well as some friends with" ???? Change back to original: "with the family and some friends with"

131. 1. 4. " we bought thirty-seven" Change to: "we bought thirty-eight"

136. 2. 3. " Underground and sat in the train" These are TWO DIFFERENT TRAINS. Change back to original: "Underground, and as he sat in the train"

138. 6. 3. "as the right engine" Change to: "as the left engine"

149. 1. 1. "she controlled powerful men" Change back to original: "she controlled these powerful men"

161. 4. 8. "back to bed and lied next to her" ???? Change to: "back to bed and slept next to her again"

162. 3. Last line " fuel-he could do whatever he wanted with it." Change to: " fuel-that he could sell or do with whatever he wanted."

172. 1. 5. "engine started acting up" ????? Change back to original: "engine started acting up"

174. 4. 4. "Lord" Change back to original: "lord"

174. 4. 7. "Lord" Change back to original: "lord"

175. 3. 1. "Lord" Change back to original: "lord"

175. 3. 2. "Lord's" Change back to original: "lord's"

175. 3. 6. "Lord" Change back to original: "lord"

175. 4. 1 "anyway" Change back to original: "any way"

175. 4. 7. "Lord" Change back to original: "lord"

176. 1. 3. " The IRA had already sent it to certain" (too many alreadys) Change back to original: " The IRA had previously sent it to certain"

176. 2. 1. "Lord" Change back to original: "lord"

176. 3. 2. "Lord's" Change back to original: "lord's"

177. 2. 1. "Lord" Change back to original: "lord"

177. 3. 5. "Lord" Change back to original: "lord"

177. 3. 10. "Lord" Change back to original: "lord"

177. 4. 1. "Lord" Change back to original: "lord"

182. 4. 4. "should have been made to" Change to: "should have been used to"

183. 1. 1. " Like a great many in groups like the IRA, Sean and his Irish girlfriend lived and ate and drank and worked. They even sometimes mated with a partner whose name they never really knew." This first sentence makes absolutely no sense by itself! Change back to original: " Like a great many in these groups like the IRA, these two lived and ate and drank and worked and even sometimes mated with a partner whose name they never really knew, exactly the same as Sean and this Irish girl."

187. 4. 4. "Lord" Change back to original: "lord"

187. 4. 7. "Lord" Change back to original: "lord"

187. 4. 8. "Lord" Change back to original: "lord"

187. 4. 10. "Lord" Change back to original: "lord"

187. 5. 1. "Lord" Change back to original: "lord"

188. 1. 2. "Lord" Change back to original: "lord"

188. 1. 5. "Lord" Change back to original: "lord"

193. 2. 16. "Lord's" Change back to original: "lord's"

194. 1. 3. "jet way" Change to: "jet-way"

194. 1. 5. "jet way" Change to: "jet-way"

194. 4. 1. "everyday" Change back to original: "every day"

195. 1. 9 "everyday" Change back to original: "every day"

195. 2. 1. "Lord" Change back to original: "lord"

195. 2. 14. "Lord" Change back to original: "lord"

200. 1. 1. "Lord's" Change back to original: "lord's"

205. 2. 4. "and more." Change to: "And more like Sean buying up 96% of the stock emulating Henry Ford who did even better by simply closing his plant after producing the last Model T car. Henry Ford allowed everyone to think he was broke as he cheaply accumulated all of the Ford Motor Company stock in America while he secretly put together his new River Rouge plant to build the Model A car. Thereafter one could only buy Ford Motor Company of Canada stock until the Ford Family again issued stock, here in America, just before the Edsel.

205. 2 . 5. "The names have all been changed" Change to: "The names in similar events have all been changed"

207. 4. 1 " people like Sean who can get women to work hard for them with money," ???? Change to: "people with money like Sean, who can get women to work hard for them,"